Construction- First Draft

This is the first draft of my construction. There are many areas I think I can improve on, namely the editing- I like the use of a filter in post production as I think it establishes atmosphere, but I don't like how small and insignificant the credits look on each frame. I want to make them a different colour and larger, so they make more of an impact and fit with conventions of the thriller genre. I also think there could be more narrative clues placed throughout the sequence, because I think it gets quite boring towards the end. From feedback from my target audience and my teacher, I will build on this initial draft and develop it into something more professional looking.